06-06-2007, 09:30 AM
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Here are the poems removed today from the Deviant Haiku V thread. If you suddenly get a wild itch to fix the meter of your poem (needs to be 5, 7, 5), feel free to repost.
Llast line is only 4 syllables:
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Originally Posted by {OF}Flying_Dutchman
Zambrano hits him
Sox sucky season so far
Cards coming back
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This one has a meter of 4, 9, 5, rather than 5, 7, 5:
Quote:
Originally Posted by {OF}Impaired
The point of this
Is beyond my capabilities
Ignorance is bliss
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(I really liked that you rhymed the first and third lines. I haven't really been observing that particular tradition, but it's a nice one.)
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